This is on The Obscurian, but I don't want Chupacabra to be stopped, even though I don't think any of us look at it anymore. Oh, sad.
Summer crawls 'til Winter snows
And all will come undone
People crash while no one knows
That none of us have won
All wear masks to hide the pain
And truth is buried deep
Twisted tongues will lie again
For pride they wish to keep
Vile words spat without thought
Cut deep into the bone
See the mess that Man has wrought
Blind to what we're shown
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Cram me full of Truth and Ugly- so wiggerless wireless that it hurts- it's Life in spurts.
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1 comment:
There is a straightforwardness to this that is refreshing. Still, I think parts like "All wear masks to hide the pain /And truth is buried deep" would only be made stronger if they were enacted rather than stated. You have some strength with imagery and I think you should use it instead of leaning on the abstract words like pain and truth. Show us the pain! Show us the truth!!
I say this because when you do, your writing is at its best.
Oh, fine, lets resurrect the beast!
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